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    dots Submission Name: Fed Updots
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    Author: MsUnderstood
    ASL Info:    22/ Female/ Stuart, FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 26/21/22
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Description:
       This poem was written for this girl i went to middle school with a very long time ago. Im sure you know the girl im talking about every school has one of these girls ya know....the one who is always like pitty me for attention every other week she says shes been raped or shes pregnant or shes had a miscarriage....ya that girl


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    dotsFed Updots
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    You lie

    You cry

    You say you want to die

    I'm sick of the drama

    If you want to cry go to your mama

    My nerves have been shot to high

    My mind is made up and my sympathy will die

    For you the sadness and lies canít tell

    How you pushed us all to hell

    My heart is turned and so is my head

    Go and cry yourself to bed

    Good-bye my little whiner

    And the words on your binder

    must be true

    Because the lost soul isn't me it's you

    ~ Ms. Understood




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      We all find ourselves in a position like this sometime in life, and i believe that you did a very good job of bringing it to life here. I believe you have a great talent.

    Keep it up,

    Sage
    | Posted on 2012-01-08 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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