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    dots Submission Name: A fateful Dreamdots
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    Author: MsUnderstood
    ASL Info:    22/ Female/ Stuart, FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 26/21/22
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       A dream that i had one night when i was 17 i woke up a wrote this half asleep lol


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    dotsA fateful Dreamdots
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    Heís been in my mind all these times
    Twisting my heart, it bends and binds

    Iíve dreamt of him all him all these nights
    My body craving his gentle bites

    The remembrance of him inside my soul
    Is too much for my mind to control

    Heís got me twisting and turning
    My whole body feels like its burning

    I am down to my last breath or so it would seem
    But somehow you still made me scream

    Our drizzled bodies intertwined
    Like a lovers secret bind

    My body trembles and you completely stop
    Because youíve shifted me to the top

    Pulling my hair and scratching my back
    Is there nothing this guy lacks

    Being as quiet as we can
    Is just too much than I can stand

    ~Ms.Understood




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      oh wow, this is right to the point isn't it, it was enjoyable to read until i read the 17 part at the end. kind of made me feel like a total sleeze ball. this is incredibly graphic, i guess that means it was a really good dream, congradulations on that and making me feel like the most awkward man on earth.
    | Posted on 2012-01-05 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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