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    dots Submission Name: Ancient Bassdots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 324
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    Description:
       Jan 1st poem, dunno what came over me. What are your thoughts?


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    dotsAncient Bassdots
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    Let my word feel
    through
    its ancient bass

    For All that I believed
    was the never ending
    feeling
    I would like to know

    I saw what was seen and when that left
    Everything about it was so
    innocent
    and it quickly disappeared
    so quickly
    so quickly
    But my life came to be
    after his disheveled smile
    looked at me
    I began to see
    him
    and the world
    that stood before
    me

    And what did
    I
    want to know?

    That angels lasted.

    That words parted worlds

    Just for me. Just by me.




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