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    dots Submission Name: Ancient Bassdots

    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Jan 1st poem, dunno what came over me. What are your thoughts?

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    dotsAncient Bassdots

    Let my word feel
    its ancient bass

    For All that I believed
    was the never ending
    I would like to know

    I saw what was seen and when that left
    Everything about it was so
    and it quickly disappeared
    so quickly
    so quickly
    But my life came to be
    after his disheveled smile
    looked at me
    I began to see
    and the world
    that stood before

    And what did
    want to know?

    That angels lasted.

    That words parted worlds

    Just for me. Just by me.

    Submitted on 2012-01-01 01:11:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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