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    dots Submission Name: ??Confused??dots
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    Author: MsUnderstood
    ASL Info:    22/ Female/ Stuart, FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 26/21/22
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 326
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    dots??Confused??dots
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    Spinning in circles her mind races
    all his words have her doing paces
    the deep despair in her frigid heart
    makes it hard for love to start
    she doesn’t want to hurt anymore
    but her distrust makes his eyes pour
    she didn't want to let him inside
    all she wanted was to hide
    her thoughts mixed up, can't make-up her mind
    trying but so hard to find
    a reason for her trust to be gone
    knowing somehow he doesn't belong
    she never wants him to leave
    but trusting him is so hard to believe
    a tornado are her thoughts of pain
    & questions of what’s to gain
    so confused of what’s to come
    and can't wait till the deed is done

    ~Ms.Understood




    Submitted on 2012-01-02 17:06:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very good piece my only problem is, though minor, the fact that you used & instead of saying and. I know no big deal, but it does kind of subtract some of the seriousness of the emotion when you take small short-cuts like that.


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    Mikey Bee
    | Posted on 2012-01-07 00:00:00 | by MikeyBee | [ Reply to This ]


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