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    Author: Katsi039tsahente
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 4/17/25
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    When I told you goodbye,
    I didnt want there to be any good in our bye,
    Our last embrace,
    Was the last time I felt anything,
    When you walked away, you took it all
    My heart, My soul, My reason.
    You took everything away,
    A bullet to the heart?
    More like a knife to the soul.
    I had it all,
    But see I was young and stupid.
    Still dont give you the right to take it all.
    I cant even love without longing for you,
    Why should I care?
    You left me out in the dark water,
    Blood pool,
    Shark water, please let me free,
    You drown me in every tear,
    Every weep.
    You used to wipe those tears away now you force them out,
    You make them run.
    Run down the street like my wrist,
    But i dont blame you,
    If i was in your shoes I'd be running too.




    Submitted on 2012-01-04 00:18:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah, I have been here, this is very good.
    Takes me back to that "ultimate" breakup, the one that forever affects the rest of your life.
    My favorite line is "I didnt want there to be any good in our bye,
    Our last embrace,
    Was the last time I felt anything,"

    I'd like to tell you it gets better, but it really doesn't you will just fill that empty space with time, and new experiences and new lovers and new dreams and goals, but you still know it's all just replacing what should be there.
    | Posted on 2012-01-06 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]


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