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    dots Submission Name: My namedots
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    Author: MsUnderstood
    ASL Info:    22/ Female/ Stuart, FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 26/21/22
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 465
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    dotsMy namedots
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    F ~ is for how fucked up I really am inside

    E ~ is for the excuses I make up in my mind

    L ~ is for the lies I constantly tell myself

    I ~ is for the ignorance I have for everyone else

    C ~ is for the constant worry for everyone I know

    I ~ is for the innocence I wish I had to show

    A ~ is for the apathy I wish I never had

    See my name does nothing but make me sad

    ~ Ms. Understood




    Submitted on 2012-01-04 13:07:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Is it wrong to say this is fun? I felt like I was watching a cynical cheerleader. Shaking her pom-poms and jumping up and down, all the while rolling her eyes.

    It has a level of negativity to it, but the style makes it seem almost to be sarcasm rather than genuine emotion.

    Regardless of whether I'm getting the intended effect or not, I enjoyed reading this.

    Jane
    | Posted on 2012-01-05 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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