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    dots Submission Name: hookdots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 319
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotshookdots
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    i.
    I was smaller than I'd imagined.
    in my mind I was a super hero.
    I could dodge false pretenses
    and greed disguised as affection.
    then I fell.
    afflicted.
    like I carried a contagion that would
    lead to hopelessness.
    no. that isn't true.
    I'm the girl who still puts on fairy wings
    no matter how many times they've been
    bent and broken
    by Pan or Hook or Crook or God.

    ii.
    my feet are scaly.
    does Obama get dry feet?
    or does someone bathe them in oils
    like they did with Jesus?

    iii.
    I like to write with my eyes closed so not even I am watching.
    bon voyage!
    only parts of me will float back.
    others will be dragged deep beneath blue-black water.
    no matter how I thrash my fins
    I only end up swimming in circles until finally
    my mouth invites the hook in.
    I open my big fish mouth as wide as it will go
    and my eyes bulge as the water weeps off them.

    iv.
    sometimes it's like I'm running away,
    other times you're the prey.
    or do I fish but then I'm the bait?

    If you choose to eat me I hope you swallow me whole
    and I live inside you, eating your roe and your ribs
    until you are taken from the inside out

    v.
    and when I say good night . . .

    is it fair to pretend that I don't understand all the people I am and all the things I claim to be?
    goodnight moon has turned to blood diamonds
    but I'm still asking where the wild things are
    and who speaks for the trees now
    and can it be me?

    vi.
    I can't fish.
    I don't have the constitution for it.
    I wish I could farm and grow dreams.
    Then I'd never go hungry.




    Submitted on 2012-01-06 11:12:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i really like all the allusions in here, especially the obama/jesus thing..

    i would use "i invite the hook in" so that mouth is not repeated so close together.

    but a good piece here.

    "i live inside you eating your roe and ribs"

    how intimate...


    "i don't fish...i wish i could farm and grow dreams"

    so do i!
    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-01-07 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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