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    dots Submission Name: Mask The Paindots
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    Author: MikeyBee
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 9/4/2
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsMask The Paindots
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    Crack this fragile shell
    To expose the lie
    That is me

    Look past this pasted smile
    To focus on the tears
    That I bleed

    Smash the walls
    To find the heart
    That is ashen

    Break the surface
    To hear the sobs
    That I cannot release

    Shatter the facade
    To see the scars
    That are mine

    Tear the shades
    To feel the pain
    That I eminate

    Grasp the beast
    That is me




    Submitted on 2012-01-07 21:18:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow! What a pain. Amazing write. Quite stylish too.
    | Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it actually....
    | Posted on 2012-01-09 00:00:00 | by screaminsilence | [ Reply to This ]
      This sucks.


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    | Posted on 2012-01-08 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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