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    dots Submission Name: The Waiting Gamedots
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    Author: MsUnderstood
    ASL Info:    22/ Female/ Stuart, FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 26/21/22
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       this is a poem that was written when i was about 15. its kinda selfish and i feel bad about it. my now ex boyrfriend had to go to a different state because his grandmother was dyingi wanted to be there for him and i couldnt be. i was a very co-dependant girlfriend at the time. THANK GOD i got over that quick


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    dotsThe Waiting Gamedots
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    A death has broken us apart
    has burned my emotions, broken my heart

    I understand why you have to go away
    I just wish you could come home today

    I will miss you while your off up there
    just know that I'm here and I still care

    I know you wonít be gone too long
    but it's so hard for me to be so strong

    from seeing you almost every day
    to not even talking to you but having to pay

    a price I donít want to give
    but you have to go because she wonít live

    itís hard being separated, even for an hour
    but with this waiting, I donít think I have the power.

    my heart fribulates
    and bleeds
    my eyes are running dry, my desperate needs

    until you come home will be a mess
    counting the days less and less




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      Waiting is and will always be one of the hardest things to do. Even if something small or large in life. Good Work once again
    | Posted on 2012-01-15 00:00:00 | by Jawsh00 | [ Reply to This ]


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