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Ashes to Ashes

Author: sageeriol
ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314 /322 /106
Words: 70
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Ashes to Ashes

Shadow washes over me
As I fade away
And my life
Becomes a lie

I dance this waltz
In darkness
As my smile
Becomes a mask

I follow the beat
In hell
As demons
Bang broken drums

Sorrow steals my soul
As I watch
You walk away

With these words spilled
From my soiled lips
I step to the edge
To embrace the fall

Submitted on 2012-01-10 00:06:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Embracing what's wrong always leads to finally getting on the path to doing what's right. Accept the fall, then pick yourself back up again. Those who don't regret it.
| Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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