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    dots Submission Name: Ashes to Ashesdots
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    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAshes to Ashesdots
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    Shadow washes over me
    As I fade away
    And my life
    Becomes a lie

    I dance this waltz
    In darkness
    As my smile
    Becomes a mask

    I follow the beat
    In hell
    As demons
    Bang broken drums

    Sorrow steals my soul
    As I watch
    You walk away
    Alone

    With these words spilled
    From my soiled lips
    I step to the edge
    To embrace the fall




    Submitted on 2012-01-10 00:06:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Embracing what's wrong always leads to finally getting on the path to doing what's right. Accept the fall, then pick yourself back up again. Those who don't regret it.
    | Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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