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    dots Submission Name: Me??dots
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    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 600
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1427



    Description:
       Inspired by Tarot Card XIV: Temperance
    This card asks us to look at the various roles we take in life and challenges us to stay grounded in our spirituality as we make choices regarding how to be.


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    dotsMe??dots
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    Mother
    Daughter
    Oldest sister
    Best friend
    Wife
    The great resister

    Cautious
    Kind
    Resolved
    Unseen
    Wanton rage
    Erase and freeze


    Teacher
    Healer
    Psychic
    Dreamer
    Scholar
    Advocate
    Believer

    Headstrong
    Windswept
    Careful
    Free
    Grounded
    Hounded
    Wounded
    See

    Wracked past ruin
    Reckless
    Weep
    Wrecked
    Remains
    Refuse to keep

    Artist
    Muse
    Musician
    Singer
    Writer
    Speaker
    Listener
    Giver

    Many faces
    Shades of gray
    Moody
    Steady
    Loving
    Brave

    Clash and cleave
    Convey, concede
    Switch one
    Which one
    Speaks for me?

    No noun
    Nor adjective will do
    To write the right
    Or capture truth

    Divine Spirits
    Here I pray
    There's more to
    me than I can say

    Emotions
    Roles
    Resolve
    Renew
    Release
    React
    Please help me choose


    Rounding reason
    Grounded
    Staid
    The answer sets me free:

    Imperfection rules the day
    and that's just fine with me




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    ||| Comments |||
      I love this! I'm a minimalist at heart...some thing raw about being stripped bare hits home. To be honest I found devoting the first seven "semi stanzas" to such style...a bit much (for me). But the inflection that you used within is like golden thread throughout keeping it together. Just using so many descriptives (cut to minimal) can keep the mind from resting on the feeling but maybe that's the aim here? Being in constant search for clear choice and the restless discontent? Hmmm
    All and all I thought it was Good :)

    Peace
    Kelly
    | Posted on 2012-01-11 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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