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    dots Submission Name: Gone, Gone birddots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGone, Gone birddots
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    The Lasting ruins a perfect flutter as it beacons from its vortex.
    With feelings of breeze vibrating against its own moisture,
    looking down and arriving closer to the platter in which
    its own verse will play a tune masterfully as the pitches
    of an angel that trumpets the chords of a harp
    by disgracefully creating an intrusion into its own
    unceasing love. It becomes a transcript that will
    no longer be a moisture but a helix of reminiscence.




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