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    dots Submission Name: Stop!dots
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    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsStop!dots
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    Hold that thought
    It's time for pause
    When it descends
    It flaunts your flaws

    Past circumstance
    Where no one goes
    This wayward dance
    Will end in blows

    Not the outward bounding kind
    Thus inward
    Savagely
    Unwind

    Past reason wardens
    Sentinels
    Beyond these gates
    Proceed to hell

    In numb embrace
    All thoughts erase
    There's no escaping
    Sure disgrace

    Cut rhythm
    Wraps the final deal
    If you don't stop
    It never heals

    EW61
    January 10, 2012




    Submitted on 2012-01-11 21:10:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Quite a enjoyable read for me. I liked the flow of all the words. Made it easy to picture and think about the poem itself. Very well done
    | Posted on 2012-01-15 00:00:00 | by Jawsh00 | [ Reply to This ]


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