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Let Him Roam


Author: DearlyDeparted
Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211 /290 /189
Words: 43
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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An advisers opinion on a man that can't see a woman's love.


Let Him Roam



‎"Let the blind man wander," said the man to the grief stricken girl.

He lifts her chin so their eyes would meet.

"For if he's so ignorant to your love; then he deserves to travel the world lost with out you."




Submitted on 2012-01-11 21:40:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I adore this piece. Mostley I think because I can picture myself saying this to one of the many women in my life. And yet at the same time I feel like it could be and has been said to me before. There is nothing to add or detract from this piece its brevity is its strength.
Well done
-John
| Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]
  
Reminds me of a line from a movie

if he doesn't see all the beauty you have to offer he doesn't deserve to see at all

Sound like ancient proverb and sooths just the same. Love is blind and the heart doesn't always play by the rules. Yet you never know until you try. Not too sure what the &#and numbers are but all and all of feels very Confucius and I like it.

Peace
Kelly
| Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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