where you are and where you dream you should be by Mithrandir

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Submission Name: where you are and where you dream you should be dots

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Author:	Mithrandir
ASL Info:	28/m/N.Y.
Elite Ratio:	4.62 - 452/681/113
Words:	115

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
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This was written some what as a response to "Silence" by Purplesun24

where you are and where you dream you should be dots

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And the words
will never be mine to hold
like your hand under moon lit skies

Peace comes
... yeah it comes after
too much bourbon

And what I'd like to forget
are the miles spanning the distance

but what escapes me

is the sweet softness
of your voice

And I would help you face
your oldest of demons
but you were never mine
to save

And I can no longer find the strength to stand

Love carries on always
even when silence is all we share
Love carries on always
when you close your eyes
remember

there is no other place
I'll dream I should be

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  And the words
Will never be mine to hold
Like your hand under moon lit skies

Peace comes...
Yeah it comes after
Too much bourbon

Ah I seem to be a sucker for the moon these days.. As well as booze. Though I'm more of a vodka kinda girl. I also seem to be a sucker for the longing type of writes. I love how this starts. I love the middle. I love how it ends..

| Posted on 2012-09-06 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
  right where i am now...this reads me to a "t"--

and i also really like, not only the dreaming you here idea...but that you are not mine to save...

in relationships...we don't possess----we stand beside, we dream beside, we love beside.

if i did favorites...this would be in without question.

jacob
| Posted on 2012-01-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  Oops...forgot to mention

And I can longer find the strength to stand

typo maybe
| Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
  And the words
will never be mine to hold
like your hand under moon lit skies

Heartbreaking and breathtakingly beautiful!!! Life on the other side of sleep...the dreams I keep tucked tight between the sheets and my heart. Where tomorrow's are yesterday's wrapped in happily ever after rainbows that bind tightly together forever...till the alarms sound wakes me and reality comes into focus. Most of my writes have this tone and you know I'm a sucker for longing (tortured poet complex) I can't help it. The write is filled with emotion and the understanding of loving one from afar.
But this is all that and above...beyond even. I know little about the situation as a whole but enough to understand and sympathize with the jist of the piece
It is raw and real..thank you for sharing with us John.

Peace
Kelly
| Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not sure what exactly your responding to. Though I'll comment on the piece at face value. I'd rather not delve into the back round. I like trying to take emotions from the work itself.
Feelings miles apart.. spread vast over signals and cable wires. Tragic really. Finding temporary peace in a bottle marked "X".
True.. a tale no one likes to hear, but the stories all too real. The emotion in this piece is strong and thick. Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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