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    dots Submission Name: where you are and where you dream you should bedots

    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       This was written some what as a response to "Silence" by Purplesun24

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    dotswhere you are and where you dream you should bedots

    And the words
    will never be mine to hold
    like your hand under moon lit skies

    Peace comes
    ... yeah it comes after
    too much bourbon

    And what I'd like to forget
    are the miles spanning the distance

    but what escapes me

    is the sweet softness
    of your voice

    And I would help you face
    your oldest of demons
    but you were never mine
    to save

    And I can no longer find the strength to stand

    Love carries on always
    even when silence is all we share
    Love carries on always
    when you close your eyes

    there is no other place
    I'll dream I should be

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      And the words
    Will never be mine to hold
    Like your hand under moon lit skies

    Peace comes...
    Yeah it comes after
    Too much bourbon

    Ah I seem to be a sucker for the moon these days.. As well as booze. Though I'm more of a vodka kinda girl. I also seem to be a sucker for the longing type of writes. I love how this starts. I love the middle. I love how it ends..
    | Posted on 2012-09-06 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      right where i am now...this reads me to a "t"--

    and i also really like, not only the dreaming you here idea...but that you are not mine to save...

    in relationships...we don't possess----we stand beside, we dream beside, we love beside.

    if i did favorites...this would be in without question.

    | Posted on 2012-01-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Oops...forgot to mention

    And I can longer find the strength to stand

    typo maybe
    | Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      And the words
    will never be mine to hold
    like your hand under moon lit skies

    Heartbreaking and breathtakingly beautiful!!! Life on the other side of sleep...the dreams I keep tucked tight between the sheets and my heart. Where tomorrow's are yesterday's wrapped in happily ever after rainbows that bind tightly together forever...till the alarms sound wakes me and reality comes into focus. Most of my writes have this tone and you know I'm a sucker for longing (tortured poet complex) I can't help it. The write is filled with emotion and the understanding of loving one from afar.
    But this is all that and above...beyond even. I know little about the situation as a whole but enough to understand and sympathize with the jist of the piece
    It is raw and real..thank you for sharing with us John.

    | Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure what exactly your responding to. Though I'll comment on the piece at face value. I'd rather not delve into the back round. I like trying to take emotions from the work itself.
    Feelings miles apart.. spread vast over signals and cable wires. Tragic really. Finding temporary peace in a bottle marked "X".
    True.. a tale no one likes to hear, but the stories all too real. The emotion in this piece is strong and thick. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2012-01-12 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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