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Author: caldewith
ASL Info:    23/male/jupiter
Elite Ratio:    1.75 - 3 /5 /9
Words: 118
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Longing
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The empty walls that surround me
They excist to tell me that I am alone oce more
To convince me that all I have,
All I have made for my self has been in vain.
The sun rises and sets over each horison
And as each one draws itself over the sky
So do I.
I wake up to the knolege of,
There is no one
So I get up
Go to the kitchen
Smell thebread, cerial, fruit and decide
Its not worth it ill go and buy something to jeat
And so the day has begun.
Finishing breakfast served by a middle aged waitres
I find my self thinking
What next?

Submitted on 2012-01-13 21:08:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I enjoyed this read, keep up the good work Flow was really nice.
| Posted on 2012-01-15 00:00:00 | by Jawsh00 | [ Reply to This ]

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