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    dots Submission Name: Introverted Snowdots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 563
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 971



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    dotsIntroverted Snowdots
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    Who Do I aim this, request
    my scattered thoughts
    just a part of my quest
    and I guess, I am lost
    Seems I'll never find, serenity
    or any peace of mind
    guess I'll turn a blind eye
    and listen while my world collides

    Theres fire in the heavens
    it's freezing, down below
    the coldness never ceases
    it is my, introverted snow

    The colors of the leaves
    wilting, wither away
    resort to shallow breathing
    it's better, this way
    the pictures in my dreams
    mesh together, a thousand different scenes
    I'll just make believe
    that theres fire in my soul
    and theres life within the trees!!

    Theres fire in the heavens
    it's peaceful, down below
    The numbness never pleasing
    it is my, introverted snow

    The colors of the leaves
    wilting, wither away...




    Submitted on 2012-01-14 11:01:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love it, nice style.
    | Posted on 2012-01-16 00:00:00 | by SammySueYou | [ Reply to This ]


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