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    dots Submission Name: Torturedots

    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    The wirlwind begins
    In my mind
    The fuse begins
    To burn
    Raging on
    If you have to hate me
    Then I can destroy it all
    Ashes to Ashes
    Dust to dust
    It all sinks
    Into my hollow grave
    Singeing my tear stained cheek
    Numbing the ravines
    Beneath this flesh
    The hurricane
    Blows it screaming
    Breathe into me
    Quickening the flame of my demise
    I stand above it all
    And watch it crumble
    As the fire within consumes

    Submitted on 2012-01-14 20:43:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel as if you've captured my mornings wonderfully. It's always like a war zone, then the fires blaze and I'm left wondering what happened. I've got an eerie connection with this piece of yours.
    | Posted on 2012-01-26 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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