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    dots Submission Name: I Am (a monostich) dots

    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.09 - 366/363/154
    Words: 9
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI Am (a monostich) dots

    I am a stammering tongue-

    Submitted on 2012-01-17 23:51:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aren't we all?
    Don't we speak through a language that is strange to most? With our foreign lips and strange tongues, we speak to our people.....

    I don't think most will hear our message, but it's good to find some who do.

    Interesting style choice here....

    | Posted on 2012-01-22 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      I am a nervous twitch. Or a laughing stitch.

    One sentence is just not enough for me.

    But for you. . . you have very eloquently expressed a "you" for us that paints a quite vivid self-portrait. I like it, even if I imagine that you stumbled when you read it aloud. Or perhaps especially then.

    | Posted on 2012-01-20 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
    I am a stammering tongue-


    Have you ever considered stringing together a series of these shorter works as components of some larger work? I'm not suggesting that you edit the originals to force them to fit together, but I am suggesting that you list some in the order of inspiration to see if there is any related theme? As a single line, this could easily describe writers and the writing process. These are just some thoughts on your more recent minimalistic experiments.

    | Posted on 2012-01-18 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      i like how this starts out with a forcefulness..a surety and then it falls apart...the stammering...the realization of confusion as to exactly who or what i am...

    i am just trying to be...and it is a tough road...one i seem to stutter over.

    | Posted on 2012-01-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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