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alone


Author: caldewith
ASL Info:    23/male/jupiter
Elite Ratio:    1.75 - 3 /5 /9
Words: 87
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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alone



Alone
The vineyard are cold
The fields dry
I will starve this year
I will tirst.

When I awoke
I I thought I saw you
It was mearly a dream
Created by me to keep you

The sileent words
Never spoken
The too many words
Spoken by me...
Now I am ony left with thoughts.

I bore everything to you
Gave you all I had
All I could give you and more
When I asked you
All you said was "I don't know"




Submitted on 2012-01-18 00:42:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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