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No One


Author: FadeStones
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No One



No one says I'm the best
No one says I'm not the same
No one even notices me
No one even sees me

Just turn the corner
All hell breaks lose
Newbie
Newbie

On the wall
Will the newbie make it thru
Fly
Fly
Fly away

No one seems to care
No one
No one notices me
No one even guesses who I am

Newbie
Newbie
On the wall
Fly
Fly
Fly away

Like a butterfly
Pretty
Pretty
Butterfly
Small or Big

No one notices me
No one seems to care
Newbie
Newbie

On the wall
Fly away
Fly away
Like a pretty butterfly




Submitted on 2012-01-18 12:14:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmmm, Yes noobs are always outside the circle, but if you are determined you can force yourself in, and become an irreplaceable member of the group.


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| Posted on 2012-01-26 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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