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    dots Submission Name: If Today Was My Last Daydots

    Author: FadeStones
    Elite Ratio:    0.67 - 1/4/5
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    dotsIf Today Was My Last Daydots

    If today was my last day,
    I spend it the best I could,
    Leaving no stones unturned,
    Defeating my fears,

    Breaking thru,
    Leaving old pictures in the past,
    Missing you,
    Missing my family,

    If today was my last day,
    Tomorrow couldn't wait,
    Fade away,
    I miss you,

    Living each moment at its best,
    If today was my last day,
    I would try to think of you,
    Like nothing was wrong,

    Even if the Earth of tearing from its seems,
    Nothing gonna change me,
    If today was my last day,

    I tried to stay the same,
    Just like yesterday,
    If today was my last day.

    Submitted on 2012-01-18 12:20:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great job. Although I do agree with Annie about separating it into stanzas or blocks starting with "If today was my last day." Excellent work keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2012-01-21 00:00:00 | by ElspethRoseWolf | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! Awesome! Your poem is very catchy! It left me thinking but satisfied. You gave the reader just enough information for them to be satisfied with the poem but not too much that they are overwhelmed and don't have to think about it. It has a very nice flow. The only thing I would change is the fact that it did not have any formatting. I would separate it into blocks so that each block started with "If today was my last day". Great job and keep it up!

    | Posted on 2012-01-20 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]

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