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    dots Submission Name: Lipsdots
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    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       I just tried to be simple and classy ! :P


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    dotsLipsdots
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    Close so close,
    Your tender lips.
    Closing in even more;
    Scarlet rose-- your lips.
    And when I feel them near to mine,
    I feel alive. Ah! These rare times.
    So noble, so divine;
    No less than ecstacy of wine--
    Red, delicate and fine,
    Though just in a dream of mine.
    Ah! Just a dream.
    You, my love, merely seem;
    Illusion, mirage, is that your being?

    But last night when your lips were there to be kissed,
    Not a single moment I was to miss.
    I held my breath to feel the bliss.
    Then I knew for sure that you exist.




    Submitted on 2004-08-01 01:40:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the ending, you really got down on paper what a first kiss is like...very classy... yea the ending is the best part keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by Racing_Chick | [ Reply to This ]


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