words spoken

Author: caldewith ASL Info:    23/male/jupiter Elite Ratio:    1.75 - 3 /5 /9 Words: 83

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words spoken

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Did I speak too many words tonight I wonder? Words that I would rather had not said But said. Now they haunt my memory I lay awake wondering Will I be driving you out of my life? Are you in the hands of another? Will one night of sex be more Than a life of plesure? Will you stray like thoes before? Making me realize that I am alone in this world That company was not ment fore me But desertment...

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I think this is interesting. It could either be a poem about a lost love, or a one night stand. The way you styled your poem is very interesting, I am not sure yet if I like it or if it just interests me. It left me sad and wondering, almost yearning for more information on the poor chap.

| Posted on 2012-01-20 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]

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