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    dots Submission Name: Time is in the Clocksdots
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    Author: Iram
    ASL Info:    25/F/from your world
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 50/62/55
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTime is in the Clocksdots
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    Time is creeping on the walls
    In the clocks
    Time is not on the sun
    On its molten surface
    Only madness runs
    Without moments
    Without conjunction
    Between an imagination of a boiling aroma
    And the reality that defies the satisfaction
    The whole illusion
    Of more than what happened
    Is time......
    In the false reflection of its proven fact
    I am born, done and died
    Countable! I am....
    Time is not in the fallow might of the stars
    It is never been a spy in the skies
    Time is inside my heart's ambiguous rhymes
    Just a flutter of mortality
    It is just a cry.




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      i love this piece....wow.

    time is in the heart's ambiguity...yes, it is on the walls too....but like an unnatural thing ticking---

    they used to tell time by the position of the sun...but here there is the idea of time told in the most unnatural ways...almost like we are conned by it..

    like we are all mad...just like fused sentences with no punctuations...no conjunctions for transitions...our thoughts fuse together...just like time seems to...and we are no longer aware of when and where we are.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-01-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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