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    dots Submission Name: Pick up the Piecesdots
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    Author: SavedDragon
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 303/258/84
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       A piece I decided to write that discusses acts of negative connotation and negative personality traits that not only harm others but ourselves. I conclude with a positive note that there is room for change. There are also references to the seven sins, I believe that is where most of my inspiration came from.


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    dotsPick up the Piecesdots
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    Hate satisfies a void, it consumes the cold hearted
    Animosity we can't avoid if we don't end what we started

    To have a way with words speaks the truth from within
    Or it's silent like snow in a cold winter's wind

    Human desperation seduced by what could never be reached
    We will fail to reach goals if we do not believe

    The sad man will sit and drink away his sorrow
    Forgetting the night, won't remember tomorrow

    Temptation is the devil that takes the weak essence fast
    Instant gratification for the mind and results that won't last

    Depression will devour your being like a flesh eating bug
    We lose ourselves through obsession like the perfect drug

    The subconscious echoes hateful thoughts that can't be erased
    Fatal outcomes and damage that can't be replaced

    We become fragmented by the broken pieces of hope and desire
    A lost sight of dreams through a blurred downward spiral

    A wasteland that has burned away morality and good deed
    Harsh realities clashing with envy and greed

    Subtle insults domino into the snowball effect
    The vicious cycle continues until nothing is left

    Shattered like glass careless deeds, never ceases
    Until we come to terms, and at last pick up the pieces.




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      This is epic, I enjoyed this read very much. I can feel what you're saying very strongly. Thank you.



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    | Posted on 2012-01-26 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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