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    dots Submission Name: Chainsdots
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    Author: FadeStones
    Elite Ratio:    0.67 - 1/4/5
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsChainsdots
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    These chains have gotten heavy
    Forever weighing on my soul
    They have taken over my life

    With these chains, I have no control
    My heart is aching
    I cry out for help
    My strength is breaking

    With these chains, I have no control
    I try to break away
    To let go forever
    I will be free some way

    With these chains, I have no control
    These chains have gotten heavy
    Forever weighing on my soul

    They have taken over my life
    With these chains, I have no control
    With that, its over




    Submitted on 2012-01-23 10:58:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm, somewhat redundant, but you have a decent concept. Elaborate on it, and it could be an epic write.


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    | Posted on 2012-01-26 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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