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Chains


Author: FadeStones
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Words: 96
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Just random


Chains



These chains have gotten heavy
Forever weighing on my soul
They have taken over my life

With these chains, I have no control
My heart is aching
I cry out for help
My strength is breaking

With these chains, I have no control
I try to break away
To let go forever
I will be free some way

With these chains, I have no control
These chains have gotten heavy
Forever weighing on my soul

They have taken over my life
With these chains, I have no control
With that, its over




Submitted on 2012-01-23 10:58:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmmm, somewhat redundant, but you have a decent concept. Elaborate on it, and it could be an epic write.


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| Posted on 2012-01-26 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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