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    dots Submission Name: what do they have that I don't?dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 763
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    Bytes: 981



    Description:
       Jolene, jolene, jolene, jolene
    Im begging of you please don't take my man
    Jolene, jolene, jolene, jolene
    Please don't take him just because you can

    You could have your choice of men
    But I could never love again
    Hes the only one for me, jolene
    -Jolene by:Dolly Parton-


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    dotswhat do they have that I don't?dots
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    I see the way you look at them
    like I'm not even around.
    aren't I the one you fell for
    or the one who let you down?

    I see the way you flirt with them
    what do they have that I don't
    I never left you by yourself
    even leaving you, I won't.

    so how can you joke about them?
    everyone says it's screwed up.
    I've given you two prefect kids
    a daughter and your son.

    I know when you are lying.
    I know when you are hiding.
    I wish you didn't leave me by myself
    alone and left cold, crying.

    just tell me, are they worth it?
    and then I'll be on my way.
    give me two good reasons.
    convince me why I should stay.

    five years is a long time.
    I'm asking you not to go.
    I'm asking you one thing only,
    what they have that I don't!





    Submitted on 2012-01-23 23:42:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi this is so true maybe human nature it stays with us even when we get older i have always caught my girl friends cheking out other gents and i can be honest and say in past i have done it
    sometimes i think its on purpose
    i like how you put it together nice write

    sandman
    | Posted on 2012-01-24 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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