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All at once


Author: my shadow
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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All at once



I would say to you a million words of love
all at once,
if I could
I would give you a million caresses
all at once,
if I could
I would give you a million kisses
all at once,
if I could
I would stay by you a million years
and more,
if I could
These things I would do a million years
and more,
if I could
And if you give me just a chance
I will




Submitted on 2012-01-25 07:13:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Aww so sweet
| Posted on 2014-03-07 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
  Very simple yet very deep. I love it and there are never enoug words or the right words to express pure love...stormy
| Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  Short and simple. I believe this piece is good in its simplicity, in a way I feel that makes it more honest.



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| Posted on 2012-01-25 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
  So many times we go thru life just wanting that one chance to show someone we truly care and we're overlooked because some people only look for the right now instead of the bigger picture. Its pieces of art like these that need to be shared more often. Great job and keep it up
| Posted on 2012-01-25 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]


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