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    dots Submission Name: Dreamdots
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    Author: thezeroman88
    ASL Info:    23/m/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 64/101/28
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsDreamdots
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    In our dreams we saw glimpses of the world outside the cave.
    Remember, I went there once with you,
    The star-dark sky lit the night around us
    And we were light.

    We sat on the roof of the world,
    The clouds flowing through us
    Human forms mirrored the turnings of the moon
    And we were one.

    The trees were waving as the sun came up.
    The flowers in the valley smiled
    And the snow white peaks winked back
    We danced with the morning dew.

    I only left the darkness for a day, and that was long ago,
    But when I dream,
    The stars still dance in the mountain skies.




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      I still think of my perfect day.

    You've captured the emotion beautifully. There isn't anything to be said critique wise.

    This poem holds more than words on a screen for me.

    Wonderful job.

    ~ nikki
    | Posted on 2012-02-16 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the imagery a very beautiful piece of writing and im sorry i cant find more to say. Adding it to favs :)
    | Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm entranced by the imagery of it all. The content is quite whimsical. It has a majestic quality that a lot of writers lack these days.
    | Posted on 2012-01-25 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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