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    dots Submission Name: Why... Even Botherdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Depressed
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    dotsWhy... Even Botherdots
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    Your deception is that of a master skill level
    For you had me believing you for some time,
    I believed in you
    I live in the moment
    For the moment
    Based on my present feelings
    I shouldn't have ... I knew better

    But ask me if I care??
    NO!! Because you were worth it...

    For this sacrifice of myself in return my belief in you...
    I now pay the ultimate price...
    I now sit here, cradling myself… rocking back-and-forth, in a soothing manner
    With hopes this endless pain soon ceases its warpath upon me!

    Daddy,
    Why am I an unwanted child??
    Why do you say you care, yet your actions speak dramatically different than your words?
    Why do you constantly have me in tears...
    Yet still here I AM
    HERE I AM
    And... I want my daddy...
    Am I foolish?

    I suppose so.

    Here I thought I found the one parent who would actually love me...

    It is obvious I was wrong... I apologize, for the nuance.







    Submitted on 2012-01-25 20:20:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is "nomral"to crave and want that love from parents, just a very hard road to tread when you finally let it go. Keep writing i have to say it one of the things that helped me the most.
    | Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, feeling unwanted by the people that should want you the most is painful. I have experience with this feeling so this struck home for me. Very good piece, though I know it was hard.


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    | Posted on 2012-01-26 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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