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Of Man and Hell

Author: sageeriol
ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314 /322 /106
Words: 54
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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many horrible things are done in the name of love.

Of Man and Hell

Assassin of the mind.
Breaker of spirits.
This thing.
This word.

Turn one inside out,
And rend the soul
Tear the heart.
This abomination.

Build false hope.
Offer your idols.
Crumble lives.
Destroyer of man.

Wage war.
Burn cities.
Share your lies.
Bring your untrue comfort.

Submitted on 2012-01-25 21:53:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  sure does build false hope....hmm.
thanks for this. its painful truth yet we still hold on to that thing don't we? something deep inside of us reaches out for it and we have little falling for the enemy kind of.
I'm quite done with it myself but every now and then i find myself feeling lonely.

Nice work!
| Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]
  I think you hit the nail on the head
with this piece, I have stopped
bothering to try and put the pin back into this grenade called love, not much left to blow away anyway, I enjoyed this, good concise and meaningful.
| Posted on 2012-01-26 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, that's certainly one way to look at it. Untrue comfort... but the same could be said with anything that is temporary in nature. The circle of life kind of thing? Extremes face off, run away, but it all meets back in the middle some where, some time, some way. But it's sooo easy to get addicted to. Endorphins rule!

You'll have to pardon me, I'm in the middle of reading Hesse's Steppenwolf. I like your mindset, especially when you've flattered my own work so.

"Love isn't there to make us happy. I believe it exists to show us how much we can endure."

HERMANN HESSE, Peter Camenzind
| Posted on 2012-01-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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