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    dots Submission Name: new girl in my life dots
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    Author: hockey26
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    Description:
       new to writing poems, but im a romantic sensitive guy and i'd love some feedback both positive and negative. thankyou.


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    dotsnew girl in my life dots
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     What is this that I feel when Iím with you. 

    Everytime I see you I wana call you my boo.

    Always know that I wont put you in harms way.

    Cuz youre a perfect fit in my arms each and everyday.





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