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    dots Submission Name: empty-fulldots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 62/89/71
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsempty-fulldots
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    this empty that i feel
    has never made me so full
    you take away my breath
    you fill my empty hole
    in my heart
    in my chest
    held inside your hands
    i've never felt so much
    never felt this safe and sound
    i have no words
    inside my head
    only this ache inside my heart
    this hunger for my lover
    i can not break or fall apart
    you fill me full of empty
    nothing left inside me
    you take the beat right from my heart
    and i've never been so happy
    i've never felt this way before
    never been so empty-full
    never thought a word like love
    could be a term that i endure
    i want to share my all
    give my everything
    i don't have much but what i got
    means the world to me
    and i never thought i'd want to
    show anyone the holes
    inside my heart
    where i fell apart
    but here i am pried open
    here i am unbreathing
    here i am my heart stoped beating
    because you've taken it all from me
    the pain and hurt
    the fear and anger
    replaced with a word i've never felt before
    you've taken my breath
    i am empty-full




    Submitted on 2012-01-26 09:32:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Umm. Wow, this was very good, maybe not the best flow, yet still amazingly emotional.


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    | Posted on 2012-01-26 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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