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    dots Submission Name: For Old Time's Sakedots
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    Author: MmR
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    dotsFor Old Time's Sakedots
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    Drinking

    Drunken

    makeup smeared across her face.

    Every night's the same damn night,
    searching for that memory she'll always chase...




    Submitted on 2012-01-27 16:32:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh - I knew a man like that. You reminded me so vividly about a pitiable, unreachable person.

    We can't help taking that personally: unreachables.
    | Posted on 2012-02-07 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2012-02-03 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      As for myself, I think I'll add some more bourbon to my remaining ice, maybe adding one more cube.

    A great poet (DaleP) once said that great poems are always about drinking, fighting and women. You've actually got all three here. Must be a great poem.

    I think that most of the music I like has much of the same elements. What a coincidence.

    | Posted on 2012-01-28 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Auld. Lang. Sign. Language.

    Chaos requires a clear head
    and a steady hand

    otherwise

    you become the very dna
    you've claimed to shake

    like dust
    from drunken fingertips
    | Posted on 2012-01-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      we can't drink away the past...or summon it through a bottle either...

    and she is just getting more and more damaged, trying...

    wow, this is tight and packs a wallop...

    love short pieces like that...

    i think i'll add some ice cubes to my drink...and try not to think too much.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Short but powerful. Makes me somehow think of Anne Sexton's "Her Kind".

    I have been her kind.

    Jane
    | Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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