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    dots Submission Name: Shallow Souldots
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    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsShallow Souldots
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    Cauterized these
    Wounds begin to burn.
    Filled with regret
    These memories cry
    Your name.

    Flanked by
    Self doubt
    Without amnesty.
    Scourged by my own
    Empathy.

    Flailing at
    My ego.
    Made inept
    By hesitation,
    Procrastination.

    Inspired to hate
    Doomed to love.
    Folding in on
    Myself,
    Yet standing still.

    Holding my hand out
    To grasp your reflection
    In a frosted mirror.
    Fleeing to the
    Excuses
    I use for self
    Betrayal.




    Submitted on 2012-01-28 20:51:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      these doesn't seem shallow it seems lost. we've all been there i think. down on ourselves. hope you cheer up. my only suggestion is to change the title.
    | Posted on 2012-02-06 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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