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    dots Submission Name: DeadSeaGoddessdots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    A moon dream floats
    on satin sea.
    Teasing sharks to dance
    within the vault
    of a romantic
    blood spree.

    Midnight twirling she
    whirls the world

    A luminous shadow
    from the depths of
    a murdered sun.

    Bare before the fall
    she was there to see it all

    Funny faces
    fancy frowns
    glimmer crowns
    she watches as they

    Her pretty petals
    in poison preen
    straight from the
    astral scene.

    Banned from heaven
    she yearns for more
    of the victims
    she adores.

    She loves to play
    with her death-brigade.
    Beneath the feeble moon's
    bruised and bloated corpse.

    Of course
    she is the storm
    of which you were

    The wind whipped froth
    of distant mythic shore,

    where monsters beget monsters.

    Vast and deep is the ocean.
    In these deeps there is room

    for shell and bone,
    spell and throne.

    A demon's mother to make
    her home.

    Submitted on 2012-01-29 23:43:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      -Dear Master DaleP, I bow down as your humble reader, for this poetic rhythmic piece has royal static which is shocking and stinging my brain cells! I mean your choice of words and how you fit each rhyme so perfectly it becomes a puzzle with an amazing shape. Which I am so tempted to put up on my ink tapestry wall. -Moon dream- -Satin sea- -Shell and bone, Spell and throne- -A demon mother to make her home- What sea is this and where is it located, I don't want to swim inside the DeadSeaGoddess territory, I may never be able to see more of the diamonds that sparkle from your out of your mind and bounce onto your poetry. I'm collecting this as my fav, no wonder Monad(Bruce) recommended that I check your stuff out, it was worth it!


    | Posted on 2012-05-14 00:00:00 | by TangledInDreams | [ Reply to This ]
      The master deigns show us how it is done, and we lap it up gratefully.
    | Posted on 2012-01-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

    Another masterful demonically sorcerous mysticism. Where do you get these things? I'll bet you like to dress as the grim reaper for halloween.

    | Posted on 2012-01-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      I certainly applaud this piece. The form, the flow, the imagery; beautifully crafted.. Honestly one of the better poems I've read on this site lately. Favs. :)
    | Posted on 2012-01-30 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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