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Racing Thoughts


Author: stormyskies
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Words: 82
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Racing Thoughts



Trying to be strong
holding back tears.
Facing the day
with all its fears.
Putting on faces
trying to be brave.
I the only one
who I can save.
Cruel past
inspiring friends.
Forgiving myself
making amends.
Wishing for more
wanting for less.
Not giving in
to all this stress.
Falling short
rising above.
Working on me
falling in love.
Lifted to heights
feeling anew.
Mind scattered
security in you.
Passing moments
each so long.
Knowing with you
that I belong.




Submitted on 2012-01-31 22:02:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Another magnificent write. I love how it flowed right off the screen and into my mind. It fit together to well that the flow was completely uninteruppted. Again, I know the feeling(s). Been there too many times.

This is truly awesome.
Keep up the great work and I'll keep reading.

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| Posted on 2012-02-02 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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