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    dots Submission Name: The Fog of The Land Mandots

    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 75/186/232
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Fog of The Land Mandots

    Indelible it stalks-
    Despite the faster you walk-
    Leaving no track in the chalk-

    Even in the freezing rain-
    It strikes with out pain-
    Seeded deep down in vein-

    It asked you curb side and you said yes-
    The fog of the Land Man-
    - deep down a wicked Sand Man---
    It crept into your freezing brain-
    - Insane it said and you thought it sane---
    It continued to rain-


    Indelible it stalks-
    A slick twist of the tongue it talks-
    Looked into your eyes and began to mock-

    Suddenly a it struck with a cane-
    Remember how it waddled down like fire on Pudding Lane--
    Awake it slept as if slain-

    It asked, slowly it followed; your will it wished to test-
    The fog of the Land Man-
    - what lies behind, nothing but a Wicker Man---
    It hungered for your life to gain-
    - Insane it said you thought it sane---
    It continued fueling your bane-


    Indelible it stalks-
    Each tick and each tock-
    Each strike of that dreadful clock-

    Burlap an old stench of grain-
    A rattle, perhaps its watch chain-
    Struggle; it was all in vain-

    It asked-
    The fog of the Land Man-
    - You died carried away by the Bag Man---
    It slipped away-
    - Insane it said you thought it sane---
    It just slipped away-

    Into the rain...

    Submitted on 2012-02-02 13:26:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I too got the "rocking back and forth" feeling as mentioned by DearlyDeparted. It's the rhythm of the thing, I suspect. Several different "men" involved here, shifting between duties. Kind of weird, kind of British perhaps. Fog and cane, rain and of course walking. Some land.
    | Posted on 2012-02-03 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      This has some what of a melodic feel to it. Honestly it feels like something a mad man might be ranting in his padded cell, rocking back and forth. Clamoring off about ..."The fog of the Land Man-
    - Insane it said you thought it sane---"
    I dig it.
    | Posted on 2012-02-03 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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