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    dots Submission Name: The Cemetary 2dots

    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 680
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       Editing and expending on an old post. It feels more complete to me this way, and helps me put some things I once lost in perspective, having revisited it.

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    dotsThe Cemetary 2dots

    Uncounted tears have been shed here.
    Uncounted souls rest here.
    Here they bless our love.
    Here they allow our joy
    Without complaint.
    Lying in each others arms
    We feel their force.
    We live as they cannot.
    Proclaim our love
    And they find it pure.
    They listen to our promises
    And allow our trespass.
    With great respect we share our love
    With the entities of nature.
    Lying on the dewy grass
    I kiss your tender lips
    And the wind sighs with us.
    Here in the land of the broken
    We become whole.
    With dead dead surrounding,
    We begin to live.
    In this forgotten place
    We create the memories
    Of a lifetime.
    The souls of the departed
    Bask in our bliss.

    Submitted on 2012-02-02 14:18:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I adore the contrast between the heartbreak and the love. No matter how terrible the dead may have it, "They listen to our promises
    And allow our trespass". A wonderful showcase of how love masters all.
    | Posted on 2012-02-21 00:00:00 | by Breaca | [ Reply to This ]
      This is eerily beautiful. The last few lines:

    "Here in the land of the broken we become whole.
    With dead dead surrounding, we begin to live. In this forgotten place we create the memories of a lifetime.
    The souls of the departed bask in our bliss."

    It reminds me of a classical piece 'Danse Macabre' by Camille Saint-Saens, the souls of the dead rejoicing and dancing for love. I really enjoyed your piece and am truly envious of your poetic skills. I have difficulty writing poetry that does not rhyme. Maybe it's my OCD lol, but anyways this was great. I write as a release as well and it looks like it's done us both good!
    | Posted on 2012-02-15 00:00:00 | by Realitywarp87 | [ Reply to This ]

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