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    dots Submission Name: Life's A Struggledots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Just doing some reminiscing about my life, and the struggles I've faced.

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    dotsLife's A Struggledots

    My whole family came from nothing,
    Trying to amount to something,
    We managed to maintain,
    In this world,
    Where life's a constant soaking rain,
    And we can't crontrol the weather,
    So there's no rapture in the chain,
    It's a cycle,
    And whether,
    We keep on moving on,
    People don't get used to,
    The life that they live,
    That's why we give in quickly,
    And we cease to breathe.
    Suicide in the daily news,
    Another person dies,
    But who are we to choose?
    We're puppets in reality,
    So God pulls the strings,
    And so we're ready to die.
    No one cares; so I'm just kicking back,
    Quick to react,
    Maintaining in this world,
    With this miserable struggle,
    Where all I can do,
    Is make my scratch,
    Resulting in me,
    Expressing my pain,
    While my stutus is humble.

    Submitted on 2004-08-01 11:24:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's lame you guys, just read it and help with spelling errors. Anyway, you did have a few, run it through spell check. I thought it was good, kind of a little too straight forward. I like how you related yourself to everything else in the world.
    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      i actually have the same rule...if theres 3 spelling errors and it becomes difficult to read, i stop. so...I stopped.

    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by brunov68 | [ Reply to This ]
      I have a couple of rules I stick to while reading other peoples poetry...the number one being after three typos I quit reading...you really seem to have a grasp for writing and it's a shame that when you pour your heart out on paper you can't take a little time to do your best to make sure your spelling is correct, especially since you have access to the internet....i'm not trying to be down on you but rather help you be the best you can. Fix it up and I'll read it again.
    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]

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