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Clouded Mind

Author: stormyskies
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Clouded Mind

Once the mask had fallen,

all that could be seen was me,

quiet tears rolled down my face,

from sadness that set me free.

Years of built up emotion,

stuffed down deeply inside,

rapidly tumbled outwards,

my feelings I could not hide.

So much energy taken,

to hide away from the rest,

I began to feel quite lost,

lacking in false confidence.

Although surrounded with love,

somehow I felt alone,

many did not understand,

the feelings I had shown.

At times I wanted to withdraw,

creep back into fantasy land,

yet as I would begin to do this,

someone extended a helping hand.

For that I was most grateful,

yet I didnt know what to do,

feelings overwhelmed me,

because they were all so new.

Realising I would move forwards,

and learn to be just me,

my mind still felt clouded,

a future so difficult to see.

Upon looking back I realise,

I need not have been so scared,

I have gained so very much,

through learning to trust and share.

Submitted on 2012-02-05 08:18:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you know what this is VERY clear which is good. i was expecting something different from the title and a positive resolve was pretty cool. maybe call the the clearing of a cloudy mind? or something. sounds more like that end note makes the song in my opinion. keep sharing!
| Posted on 2012-02-06 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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