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    dots Submission Name: Eating her Wordsdots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsEating her Wordsdots
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    she kept her lips shut tight
    wrapped arm around arm
    held her breath and prayed
    until contrition turned to manna in her mouth
    and she could swallow it whole
    like the body of Christ
    she swallowed

    then opened her mouth for more





    Submitted on 2012-02-07 12:28:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I just do not get this eating of
    human flesh bit. What kind of
    sicko thought that part up?
    Drink the blood eat the body
    this is crazy.
    It's bad enough we eat
    mammals. Cannibalism is just
    way over the top for me.

    Eat her words? She said something
    she is now force to take back, or
    just regrets saying?

    Then she finds she likes repenting.
    Does this lead to anything kinky
    like flagellation? You know like
    beat me
    I'm a bad girl?

    In the end while I think I know
    a little you leave me with an aching
    head. I just do not really get whatever
    it is that is wrong with this women.
    | Posted on 2012-09-08 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      this hit me in a different way...having been raised catholic...

    and i remember all of those people getting communion...and then returning to their seats, and looking so crestfallen and serious...

    i wondered, "if you are receiving the body of christ...should you not be joyful?"

    why the frown? does religion turn us upside down?
    sprituality should excite us...make us jump for joy...

    and contrition should wipe away the remorse and sadness and lift us up where we belong...as the song from "officer and a gentleman" said.

    i agree with lloyd...you are amazingly versatile...

    and a new one from you is like the Beatles putting out a new single...everyone held their breath until they could get to finally hear it.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-02-07 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the imagery of this, very personal, very spiritual. The closing could go either way, I suspect. One would expect that "having been contrite", there should be a period of grace which follows for at least some time before it is deemed necessary to once again be remorseful and ask forgiveness unless the cycle repeats so very quickly.

    Once a day is about what I feel "necessary" although I've usually built up a pretty good balance on such charges against whatever my credit limit might be by the end of any given day. Evidently I have at least a gold card.

    You are quite versatile. Quite. Just that we always remember where manna comes from. I do a lot of sangria myself, and appreciate at least that much Spanish. You are hereby on notice that all your works are considered "favs" even if I don't put them on my page. I did that with DaleP also so you are in good company.
    | Posted on 2012-02-07 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Hummm: yummy. It makes me wonder what we did to deserve such fate (body of Christ). "Contrition turned to manna" I just loved that.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-02-07 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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