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    dots Submission Name: In the Morningdots

    Author: Realitywarp87
    ASL Info:    25/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27/53/63
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsIn the Morningdots

    The morning sun rises
    As dawn sets to ride away
    It peers over the horizon
    And marks the start of a new day

    The gentle morning breeze
    and the flickering sun's rays
    Awaken my restless body
    From the field in which I lay

    The morning dew sparkles
    Off my face they seem to play
    As I baske here in the grass
    My private hideaway

    The morning sounds of freedom
    From the subtle songs of the bluejay
    Have me captivated
    And I slowly drift astray

    The morning is soon ending
    Much to my dismay
    But what I love most about the morning
    Is that tomorrow it replays

    Submitted on 2012-02-07 20:04:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah, what they said.

    frame this picture.

    | Posted on 2012-02-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah yes, but that means tomorrow is only yesterday beyond the here and now. And the dawning of a new day is an excellent time to contemplate your future not revel in the fact we might see tomorrow.

    | Posted on 2012-02-07 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice indeed. We've had some very nice mornings lately and I have been up to see the sunrise. I wasn't sure what to make of the line "As dawn sets to ride away" but what follows makes it fit. We don't think much of the morning ending as it transitions into day and then evening. Doing so makes us appreciate it for what a special thing it is. Thanks
    | Posted on 2012-02-07 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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