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    dots Submission Name: The Devil Takes Care of His Owndots
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    Author: Realitywarp87
    ASL Info:    25/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27/53/63
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 721
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 942



    Description:
       My personal form of confession...


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    dotsThe Devil Takes Care of His Owndots
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    I don't know how this could be
    My inhibitions get the best of me
    Suppressed desires, unwanted thoughts
    Fantasies I, long ago, managed to have fought
    I tried to cage the beast inside
    My lust for evil I strive to hide
    But the chains have rusted, the bars are broken
    And now all of my demons are out in the open
    Like the havoc stored in Pandora's box
    I thought I, cautiously, have kept it locked
    By ridding myself of the only key
    But still my demons have been set free
    I try to confess, absolve my sins
    So free from the old, my new life could begin
    But difficult it is to remain clean
    And back to the crevasse of darkness I'm seen
    With devilish creatures eating away at my skin
    Trying to burrow their evil ways in
    Into the little humanity that I have left
    Before succumbing to my eventual death




    Submitted on 2012-02-09 00:28:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Is that supposed to be "care of his own"? Instead of "car"?

    Nice rhyme, I always appreciate some rhyme. I try to do it all the time. But then so do the rappers.

    Yes, this is a common theme for us humans. Quite common. It is VERY difficult to "remain clean" as you say. Actually, it's Quite Impossible for most of us, those who are not saints anyway. I'd like to know what the "only key" is that you got rid of here. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2012-02-09 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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