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    dots Submission Name: Beyond Good & Evildots
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    Author: Realitywarp87
    ASL Info:    25/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27/53/63
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       What makes something good or bad? Or wrong and right? Should personal happiness suffer, or be sought???


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    dotsBeyond Good & Evildots
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    I have no doubt I am in war
    An inner turmoil I've fought before
    Never winning, no end in sight
    Just a constant struggle I've always bore

    This battle begins with wrong and right
    Resisiting temptations to win the fight
    But what defines a saint from a sinner,
    If the saint's held in darkness and the sinner in light?

    Could there honestly only be one winner?
    No hope for the lowly, not even a glimmer?
    I'm being pulled in two, from what I can tell
    And the damage is only wearing me thinner

    It's either good or it's bad, to obey or rebel
    It's either going to heaven or burning in hell
    My conscience is confused by internal conversations
    As an angel gives caution, while a demon quells

    This is the moment that sparks realization
    To side with the angel and be granted salvation
    To end this crusade is what I desire
    Before I fall into the demon's eternal damnation

    But it is not as simple as choosing ice over fire
    Because bad can be good, as is the truth from a liar
    To act on our impulse is only the norm
    And it is that mentality that makes my condition so dire...




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      This is a very good piece. You ask a question that many of us have contemplated before, and like all of us you have yet to find a satisfactory answer.


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    | Posted on 2012-02-16 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this and it's message. The wording is a little rough in some places but I suspect you know that as you go over it again and again along with the thoughts conveyed. It's the human condition, the balance scale which presented itself even in ancient Egyptian concept of Maat. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Maat

    Admittedly such a concept is complex in nature as it realizes that all of us will wander from profanity to piety even through the course of a day, or perhaps from minute to minute for some of us. But where will this balance out in the cosmic judgement scheme of things? The answer my friend, is blowin' in the wind. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Blowin%27_in_the_Wind

    Actually this "what's good or bad" question is also being used in my currently being written poem which keeps getting longer and longer. Very complex question, yes indeed.
    | Posted on 2012-02-09 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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