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    dots Submission Name: Honeysuckle Sunshine Wine & It ( Not complete dots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHoneysuckle Sunshine Wine & It ( Not complete dots
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    The sun you see is not what it appears to be-
    Is it he?
    Almighty?
    The warmth of absolution that you'll be paid for oblation.
    A notion fighting like attrition-
    Thought for thought...
    Step by step...
    Life, life...
    How beautiful and disgusting it is.
    The weak feeding on the weak...
    While the strong stand by-
    Laughing outside of their worlds like Olympian Gods.
    A world they built-
    Empires perceived as greed and vanity-
    Idols we emulate- hate and dissipate.
    Searching idly for a villain-
    Hate...
    It tastes of wine / Some strong and some dry.






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