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    dots Submission Name: vesicledots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsvesicledots
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    this rock is full of holes

    bending to drink
    hair dips into the cool stream
    rising, the ends fall down and cling
    to neck and water
    drops of cold wet
    fall down the back
    tickle as they trickle down the spine


    you lost in this
    expanding
    a void




    Submitted on 2012-02-11 03:49:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of Nietzsche's profound statement: "If you look long enough into the void the void begins to look back through you."

    This poem seems to be at that moment when someone realizes that they are looking through the void; the impact of that & how consuming it can be, so suddenly. I also like how fully present it is, & how it amounts to nothing in a way; that Zen way. The verb "lost" adds a complexity though that can't go without noting, & I think that there is always that lost feeling when we are startled by a realization.

    I also really love that beginning line. It is odd, & made me stop to ponder what that could mean.
    | Posted on 2012-02-13 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]
      i cling to the thought of you for as long as i can...then it somehow gets lost in some expanding void...and my love disappears among the rocks of life...there are holes in the atmosphere of us.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-02-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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