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    dots Submission Name: Pack Lessonsdots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPack Lessonsdots
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    Stop your running little wolf.
    You can not escape what you are.
    Fleeing from the primal force;
    is futile.
    For it's within;
    Not easily evaded.
    Encrypted in your genetic band.
    Leaving not even a strand untouched.
    Is it too much to just give in?
    Do not fret, it's not a sin.
    To accept what we are,
    what you always shall be.
    For it's in us all,
    even me.




    Submitted on 2012-02-11 12:11:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      as much as we don't want to...sometimes it is inevitable....we become part of the pack like everyone else...even when we fight to maintain our individuality...

    and sometimes what we are can be very different...and that is what we must embrace...

    your one line should be "to accept what we are"

    but a nice poem...a good reflection of ourselves...and the idea of running away from who we are.

    futile indeed.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-02-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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